Adding Details, elaborating ideas.

Today I learned to elaborate and add detail.

I was given this sentence:
I got out of bed this morning, had breakfast and then drove to school.

2 minutes later.... Adding details
I turned over and blearily looked at my wife as she slipped out of bed on her side. I really didn't want to go anywhere, let alone to school after a weekend away in Rotorua.

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